MIRABELLA
She maneuvers the
topic elsewhere
go on the room implies
those times
when a man is watching
hoping to
come across as a vixen
skillfully
moves her eyes away
and stands there
fills in a background of oily
black
leaves the eerie
floating nude image of
herself in white.
. . .
VIXEN
Little is said
a vixen floating
nude in white
skillfully stands there
enjoys what is given back
and forth
maneuvers the oily
black background
and realizes that nothing
fills those times
when her eyes move away
hoping to come
across the
image of herself elsewhere
exactly when
a man is watching.
. . .
FIONA
She skillfully
maneuvers the
the eerie
floating image of
her monotony
moves her eyes away
and stands there
hoping to
come across
the oily black
background
the room implies
dutifully fills in a vixen
enjoys those times
when
nothing is answered
little is said
files them in her purse.
. . .
EDNA
She fills in the background
maneuvers
her eyes away from oily black
sentences in her purse
exactly the same
nothing implies a floating nude image of
herself in white and
she realizes
that she enjoys what is given
skillfully moves
the monotony of the room
when a man is watching
stands there
those times hoping to
leave the topic elsewhere
little is said.
go on the room implies
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when a man is watching
hoping to
come across as a vixen
That sounds like a pretty accurate description of a pretty, bored young woman who works in a department store doing what pretty young women everywhere do naturally - responding to the incessant gaze of other people by posing and trying on different personas.
That one is essentially a capsule summary of Mirabella's character in Shop Girl. The others are much more deliberate departures. I enjoyed playing wih the source material to change the tone and meaning of the passage.
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